Tell an Untold Story: Final Crit

What feedback did I receive and how am I going to act upon it?

• My group suggested making the chair in page 5 orange like in my study (which Matt disagreed with). I am going to play around wit this (maybe in photoshop) because I think that it will tie in well with my coloured objects. 
• They preferred the hand painted image for page 11, which I agreed with. However, I think that it could have more depth, so I am going to try adding some more darks to the foreground.
• They suggested making the eye and mouth of the girl on page 10 sharper. I am going to try this because I think that it will make the image clearer, while still retaining its initial emptiness. I am going to play around with the sharpening tool on photoshop and also maybe just try going it with a pencil?
• They also suggested adding some watercolour to the bracelets (page 6), to draw out certain elements and make them look less mucky. I disagree with this feedback and I like the subtle murkiness to this page. I think that if anything the addition of watercolour will make it worse. However, I am still not totally happy with this page so I am going to try doing this anyway to see where it takes me.
• Some of my groups favourite pages were the ones with figures (on page 3 and 12). However, Matt thought that I should discard them all together. I can see where my groups coming from because it is clear that I have invested the most time into these pages. However, I do also agree with Matt that the figures are too fully formed and don't work so well with my concept. They almost take away from the delicate absence of a presence on the other pages. I am going to try re-working these pages with more of a subtlety of presence - maybe just adding fragments of a figure?
• Matt also didn't like the drips in factory image (page 9). I think that this is probably because they don't really add anything to the image and they are quite obvious and almost distracting. I was going to just try photoshopping them out but I think that I might instead try reworking the image, it isn't quite right.